I am working in Inktense, still. I want all manner of critiques, as in what you see that could be improved. I want to go online to sell my work, so I want to get any glitches out before I even venture forth! Anything from composition to color, anything at all that you see that needs attention, now is the time to make these adjustments, as when I am selling, i want my work to sing as strong a melody as possible!! Su
Back of Arches Cold Press, Inktense pencils and water. 5"x3.5" , I will get brave and work smaller as I get better, but for now this is roughly double ACEO size.
But to suggestions, first thing if you want to sell your stuff: Better presentation. Get better scans (or photos?) - this is blurry, and it looks like there's a shadow on the lower part. Also consider cropping differently, with either including the paper edges on all sides, or removing them everywhere.
Then the image itself.
The background over all seems a bit muddy. If rocks, I'd have suggest blue shale for this motive, to make the orange fox really stand out.
The tail doesn't seem to be connected to the fox, but just laying in front of him, since its right end is too far to the left of the image. Not exact matches for the pose, but some idea...: [link][link][link]
His forelegs seem a bit small, but the real problem is that they're too dark for the rest of the image. They're nearly black and look flat since they lack shading; I think that would have worked if you had used comic style outlines, but not like this.
Fox eyes are golden or yellow, with slit pupils, and I don't think the overall style is cartoony enough to make all-black bug-eyes work. Either way, it'd look better if there was a highlight on the eyes. (I bought white ink specifically for smallstuff like that.)
Looking at the orange part of the fur, it seems like you tried to do shading by pressing harder with your pencil in the same or a similar colour; try layering other colours instead. I went to a drawing course recently in which the instructor told us that for shadows we should use a layer of dark blue or violet over the colours (and put another layer of colours, if it became too blue), since sunlight generally is yellow.
I'd suggest that after dissolving the pencils, you go back again with a sharpened pencils and add a bit more shading and structure. The fur texture of the tail looks very nice.
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I'm not so sure about that, but I'm sure with 2 things. The tail looks like it's not connected to the body, and the head is jutting out weirdly. Umm... something... like... You saw the lines connecting to the ear? it's going up, same with the other side and looks like it's too long.
I like the texture of the background, seems ancient like. ^^ Tidy up them well would works, it's a great piece. Keep up the good work!
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TY, I am trying to get myself in a position to feel my stuff is good enough to sell, and I knew there were things I liked about this one, and things I didn't like. Su
I love your color choices. You can really 'feel' the fox's prescence XD
Most of what I can say have been said. My only qualm is that the fox seems abit blurry although that could have been your scanner. The shading on the fox is a little too saturated, IMO
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But to suggestions, first thing if you want to sell your stuff: Better presentation.
Get better scans (or photos?) - this is blurry, and it looks like there's a shadow on the lower part. Also consider cropping differently, with either including the paper edges on all sides, or removing them everywhere.
Then the image itself.
The background over all seems a bit muddy. If rocks, I'd have suggest blue shale for this motive, to make the orange fox really stand out.
The tail doesn't seem to be connected to the fox, but just laying in front of him, since its right end is too far to the left of the image. Not exact matches for the pose, but some idea...: [link] [link] [link]
His forelegs seem a bit small, but the real problem is that they're too dark for the rest of the image. They're nearly black and look flat since they lack shading; I think that would have worked if you had used comic style outlines, but not like this.
Fox eyes are golden or yellow, with slit pupils, and I don't think the overall style is cartoony enough to make all-black bug-eyes work. Either way, it'd look better if there was a highlight on the eyes. (I bought white ink specifically for smallstuff like that.)
Looking at the orange part of the fur, it seems like you tried to do shading by pressing harder with your pencil in the same or a similar colour; try layering other colours instead.
I went to a drawing course recently in which the instructor told us that for shadows we should use a layer of dark blue or violet over the colours (and put another layer of colours, if it became too blue), since sunlight generally is yellow.
I'd suggest that after dissolving the pencils, you go back again with a sharpened pencils and add a bit more shading and structure. The fur texture of the tail looks very nice.
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I like the texture of the background, seems ancient like. ^^
Tidy up them well would works, it's a great piece. Keep up the good work!
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Most of what I can say have been said. My only qualm is that the fox seems abit blurry although that could have been your scanner. The shading on the fox is a little too saturated, IMO
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